Es de una aplicación práctica tan fuerte y a la vez, tan necesaria, que es imposible ser aborrecida, todo lo contrario. Indirectamente y cada vez más llevamos camino de adoptarla como segunda lengua materna, jeje.
Una amiga estupenda me ha pedido que le eche un cable con una redacción, y creo que me voy a dar el gustazo de ser profesor de inglés por unos minutos...
Aquí el texto original:
Hi!! My friend Helen now is single! I'm going to talk about her. She is from Cartagena in Spain, she has twenty-three years old. She's like a Barbie, because she has blue eyes and long blond hair!. At the moment she works in a hospital, she's a nurse, but she doesn't like much this job. She get up at six o'clock, having a shower and go out at half past six. She breakfast in the hospital. She come home at twelve o'clock , watches tv and read any magazine. She goes shopping at a quarter past three, twice a week meet with our friends and drinking coffee. She love animals, she has two cats and one dog, she listen pop music and jazz and love dancing. I like her because is lovely, happy and very stronger, she's a bomb!
Best wishes. MJ.
Aquí marco lo que me chirría a la vista:
Hi!! My friend Helen now is single! I'm going to talk about her. She is from Cartagena in Spain, she has twenty-three years old. She's like a Barbie, because she has blue eyes and long blond hair!. At the moment she works in a hospital, she's a nurse, but she doesn't like much this job. She get up at six o'clock, having a shower and go out at half past six. She breakfast in the hospital. She come home at twelve o'clock , watches tv and read any magazine. She goes shopping at a quarter past three, twice a week meet with our friends and drinking coffee. She love animals, she has two cats and one dog, she listen pop music and jazz and love dancing. I like her because is lovely, happy and very stronger, she's a bomb!
Best wishes. MJ.
Fallos muy elementales que paso a explicar:
Helen is single now me suena mucho mejor, es cuestión de órden gramatical.
She is 20 years old. Acuérdate! To be X years old
Gets up Nunca olvides la S en la 3ª persona del singular del presente
She has a shower, She goes out... Intenta no omitir el sujeto, en inglés hay que mencionarlo siempre o casi.
She has breakfast To have breakfast
She come home Obviando la S, yo hubiera usado arrives, mucho más apropiado.
read, meet aparte de obviar el sujeto (She) te olvidas de la S
Drinking coffee para hablar de hábito usa el Present Simple siempre, nunca el continuo.
She love, la S
She listen pop El verbo es Listen to, preposición incluida; She listens to pop music
love dancing la S, aunque en este caso no suena mal la omisión del sujeto, al haberlo escrito cerca anteriormente.
like her Hubiera usado I love her en este caso, si quieres usar el like necesitas un CD (I like her DVD, I like everything she does...)
and very stronger very nunca puede ir con un comparativo/superlativo sino con adjetivos en grado positivo o adverbios (very well, very nice, very strong..)
Y esto es lo que yo hubiera hecho de haber tenido a mano papel y boli:
Hi! I am going to talk about Helen, one of my friends who is singer at the moment. She was born in Cartagena, in southern Spain. She is 23 years old, but quite open-minded. She's like a Barbie and has blue eyes and long blond hair. She currently works in a hospital, but she would rather like to get another job, that is why she does not like it much. She gets up at 6 o'clock, She always takes a shower and goes out at half past six. She often has breakfast in the hospital. Every day she arrives at 12 pm, or even later on hard-working days. She enjoys watching TV or reading any magazine. Furthermore, She goes shopping at a quarter past three. Twice a week she meets up with more friends and me to have some laughs and drink some coffee together. Helen loves animals. At home, she has got two cats and a dog. She tries to listen to music every day to get relaxed and she often chooses pop music, jazz and sometimes, she enjoys dancing. I love her because she is lovely, so jolly and quite strong as well. She's like a bomb! Best wishes, MJ.
Aquí tienes una redacción hecha por un estudiante de nivel avanzado, obviamente me he pasado un poco y he añadido adjetivos y sustantivos mucho más precisos. No obstante mucho cuidado con los linking words, que son esenciales a este nivel y te los van a mirar con lupa. Además, para no repetirte con tanto She, intenta alternarlo con el nombre propio (Helen).
Nada más por mi parte... Me toca refugiarme en los libros. Un fuerte abrazo para todos aquellos que estéis pasando fatal entre nervios y agobios.
